(You know that I love microfiction, anon? I wonder how on earth that secret could have leaked out ^^)
I’m not sure I’m going to be able to express how I feel about your story but I’ll have a go.
It’s wonderful. Absolutely wonderful. I was intrigued when I read the header, but a little uncertain. I’d never come across this particular form of microfiction before and I wondered what could be said in single sentences, even when combining them into something bigger. (For me, microfiction is about setting up a situation and then commenting on it. Even within six word stories I like to use as many sentences as possible.)
Then I started reading… and I was just blown away. You say so much using so little. Your writing style is gorgeous—the individual scenes and stories are so, so beautiful. And though they stand alone, they seem to go so naturally together—the cumulative effect had a powerful impact on me.
Really, I could quote everything back at you but I’ll try and pick out the sentences that made the greatest impression on me. “Learn” made me laugh. “Vision” made me nod in agreement with Watson. “Torn” made me smile. “Need” made me come to a complete halt—you so elegantly express a truth. And then there were the ones for Mary: “Fortune”, and “Gentle”—you took that rather bizarre metaphor that Watson uses and gave it such a perfect reinterpretation. And talking about perfect: “Never” ^^ Other ones I especially liked: “Fool”, “Sing”, “Ghost”, “Wall”, “Blur”, “Hold”, “Wash” (^_^), “Bother” (again, ^_^).
Your portrayal of Watson’s grief over Holmes and Mary brought me to tears, and then once I’d recovered, your final sentences made me cry all over again—especially the last three. ...but I do not think that there will be an ending is such a lovely conclusion.
I’m aware that I didn’t give my future assigned writer much to go on in my sign-up. I’m so touched that you took a kind of writing that is very personal and dear to me, and used it to produce this magnificent story. And you even got a pun into the title ^_^ Thank you so very much.
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I’m not sure I’m going to be able to express how I feel about your story but I’ll have a go.
It’s wonderful. Absolutely wonderful. I was intrigued when I read the header, but a little uncertain. I’d never come across this particular form of microfiction before and I wondered what could be said in single sentences, even when combining them into something bigger. (For me, microfiction is about setting up a situation and then commenting on it. Even within six word stories I like to use as many sentences as possible.)
Then I started reading… and I was just blown away. You say so much using so little. Your writing style is gorgeous—the individual scenes and stories are so, so beautiful. And though they stand alone, they seem to go so naturally together—the cumulative effect had a powerful impact on me.
Really, I could quote everything back at you but I’ll try and pick out the sentences that made the greatest impression on me. “Learn” made me laugh. “Vision” made me nod in agreement with Watson. “Torn” made me smile. “Need” made me come to a complete halt—you so elegantly express a truth. And then there were the ones for Mary: “Fortune”, and “Gentle”—you took that rather bizarre metaphor that Watson uses and gave it such a perfect reinterpretation. And talking about perfect: “Never” ^^ Other ones I especially liked: “Fool”, “Sing”, “Ghost”, “Wall”, “Blur”, “Hold”, “Wash” (^_^), “Bother” (again, ^_^).
Your portrayal of Watson’s grief over Holmes and Mary brought me to tears, and then once I’d recovered, your final sentences made me cry all over again—especially the last three. ...but I do not think that there will be an ending is such a lovely conclusion.
I’m aware that I didn’t give my future assigned writer much to go on in my sign-up. I’m so touched that you took a kind of writing that is very personal and dear to me, and used it to produce this magnificent story. And you even got a pun into the title ^_^ Thank you so very much.